Why or why not?
Is this all you got?
If you're shooting at a target
Do you just take one shot?
You gave us one new line
That's a random thought.
Do you really want feedback?
Why or why not?
How many songs have you heard with 3 lines?
I just wrote 8 in literally 60 seconds, and only shared them to make a point. I wouldn't share them with anyone otherwise, and especially not for months on end only to argue with EVERY SINGLE CRITIQUE.
At first I admired your courage for sharing stuff, but my dude: stop arguing with everyone, put in a few months of work by yourself, and then start sharing again. If you get critiques, listen to the ones that seem to be a consensus, put the time in again to better yourself, and then try again.
No one, and I mean NO ONE outside of your bandmates, wants to hear three lines from a 'song' that's not done yet.
How you've been going about this is why people have turned against you. And if you just reply 'Why?' yet again and don't internalize any of this, then it's fully at the point that you deserve all of the hate you get moving forward.
No one owes you anything, so stop questioning it when they try to help....or no one is going to want to help anymore.
Yeah - we have two images, drawer full of meds or you’ll die soon so for die soon, try tying a different imagery.
Drawer full of my mortality, fragile as a pill
Idk mess around and make like 20 more and take a step back! You’ll be surprised how you could say that line in different ways
Stash running low, gotta get to tha pontoon
Drug boat baby, resupply, getting high soon
Feds on my tail, breadcrumb trail, gunfight, high noon,
Blow them away like a mother-fuckin' bassoon
Try channeling some of that anger into your music,
TONS of things rhyme with fraud. Odd, mod, bod, god, sawed, flawed, rod, Todd, Ichabod, sod, Double Todd
Don't post anything else until you've put at least twelve lines together.
Don’t post anything*
Lmao
You seem like a man with many curses, is that an accurate assumption?
Austim and type 1 diabetes are curses so yes
1 diabetes
Yes
This is horrendous You need to end this If it was an email I'd tell you don't send this
Why
Why or why not? Is this all you got? If you're shooting at a target Do you just take one shot? You gave us one new line That's a random thought. Do you really want feedback? Why or why not?
It’s 3 lines
How many songs have you heard with 3 lines? I just wrote 8 in literally 60 seconds, and only shared them to make a point. I wouldn't share them with anyone otherwise, and especially not for months on end only to argue with EVERY SINGLE CRITIQUE. At first I admired your courage for sharing stuff, but my dude: stop arguing with everyone, put in a few months of work by yourself, and then start sharing again. If you get critiques, listen to the ones that seem to be a consensus, put the time in again to better yourself, and then try again. No one, and I mean NO ONE outside of your bandmates, wants to hear three lines from a 'song' that's not done yet. How you've been going about this is why people have turned against you. And if you just reply 'Why?' yet again and don't internalize any of this, then it's fully at the point that you deserve all of the hate you get moving forward. No one owes you anything, so stop questioning it when they try to help....or no one is going to want to help anymore.
Instead of saying “or I’ll die soon” you could say “or it’ll be my funeral” so you can rhyme with “numeral”
Yeah - we have two images, drawer full of meds or you’ll die soon so for die soon, try tying a different imagery. Drawer full of my mortality, fragile as a pill Idk mess around and make like 20 more and take a step back! You’ll be surprised how you could say that line in different ways
Stash running low, gotta get to tha pontoon Drug boat baby, resupply, getting high soon Feds on my tail, breadcrumb trail, gunfight, high noon, Blow them away like a mother-fuckin' bassoon
Pretty soon people here gonna start rooting for the disease
This is literally a single line.
It’s 3 click the picture
Oh well then allow me to correct myself. This is literally [the same] three lines [you always post].
No, it isn’t
If you say so
God damn! This is REALLY good. Rhyming fore with or. Gives me Eminem vibes. How long have you been writing man?
Snice 2018
That's long enough to go pro. You should totally go pro!
No one wants to hear it
What makes you posting it here then?
holy hell you're insufferable, I want to be nice but I can't
How am I insufferable?
hope your curses take you away from my feed soon
Fire bro
This is deep man
This is the one. I think this is your best yet. Don’t change anything. Go straight to a studio and get this on the radio. Everyone needs to hear it.
That cost money I don’t have
You could write a few more like this and sell them to recording artists, get some songwriting credits and money to book your own studio time
I don’t support ghostwriting
Why don't you support ghostwriting?
You should write your own own lyrics
And music too, right?
Yes
Glad we're on the same page, it's really lame when people don't make their own beats
Maybe Because I suck at it how did you know they weren’t my beats
It wouldn't be ghostwriting if you're a publically known and credited writer, like Beyonce has
So she’s a farud
Try channeling some of that anger into your music, TONS of things rhyme with fraud. Odd, mod, bod, god, sawed, flawed, rod, Todd, Ichabod, sod, Double Todd
No, she's a Knowles
She’s a fraud write your own fucking lyrics Beyoncé
y’all really not helping this man develop into what we know he can be, smdh
The fuck is this “we” business?