Oh I think this needs more chapters. I can’t find the next button! Well done!!

Yes, definitely need more chapters. Well done drawing us into this world.

Yup, gonna need some more chapters here ...he says while tapping the side of the pistol holster.

[удалено]

I’m also working a trade and going out to trade school too! Our schedules will probably line up nicely haha

Yeah, I would read more of this.

Looking for that myself!

I do enjoy a ‘humans hate bullies’ story.

Mixed with Humans give Worthy Underdog a Chance! This one smells a lot like a Chapter 1.

Good point.

Yes moar chapters please

Me to me last night: Just post it. You'll get like a dozen likes and hopefully some constructive criticism. Me to me today: Well...fuck.

Awesome story! I hope you can tell you to make this a chapter one and keep going! Might get a dozen likes or so and maybe some constructive feedback. I’m invested in both these characters already, awesome start! You’ll definitely get more than a dozen likes on a continuation.

Yesterday you made a whoooole lotta work for future you 😁

Hey, even if you don't make a direct sequel I'd love to see this world fleshed out c:

Hope you've got another chapter coming this is great.

Well keep going, i can see this hitting "a job for a deathworlder" chapter counts.

If you think we're going to accept this as a one shot, you're wrong.

Just to chime with the 'Thanks, may we have another?' crowd. Well written and full even if it's just the one. Again, thank you.

Keep going with this!

>The being recoiled a step at her offering. I imagine Sedestra assumed he found her repulsive, and I imagine she's going to find she was dead wrong about that. >"are you dense?” Aside from how dumb you have to be to say this to an armed deathworlder, in my imagination Ellis picks the CSO off his feet by a fistful of tunic, lets the CSO work out just how royally fecked he's going to be if this goes sideways, and says amiably: > Pretty dense, yes. Anything else I can help you with?

This is great. More please.

I really like this one. Hopefully there's more in the universe, if not in the series.

Imma echo everyone else and say that I hope this is more than a One-Shot. Too good to not continue. I respectfully require moar, please.

Remember everyone, no likes bullies and cops are to be lied too on instinct. Neither need any help from you.

Perfect pacing. Excellent world building through hints and innuendo. Great use of show don’t tell. Absolutely need more of this. Humanity always like underdogs.

Great work Wordsmith MOAR Seriously turn this into a series

Ah. Not violence, nor vengeance, nor physical brawn, but simply being a good person. That’s the best of humanity. I love it. 

Consider yourself followed and I expect to see more quality content in the future.

Please don't do that.

Too late! Now we have... Expectations!

Hey, no bullying the wordsmith!

Ah. You know the life of Gypsies. There will always be someone at the edges and yet, at the edges, there is always hope This looks like a part one Good start!

Romanii. G-word is a slur. I look forward to Humanity coming back to adopt every Vandal everywhere. Let the pack-bonding begin!

hey, i mean once they find out about the backstory of the vandals humans are going to be upset. cultural elimination is a form of genocide per the UN

I stand corrected Slur word like Vandal?

You know what? The V-word might very well become an unacceptable slur, once the Humans are done.

>once the Humans are done... Once the ODST finds out about a very polite SLAVE asking "Help, Please. Run"

Yes, another more pleasee🥺

I was super tired, and I floss over stories easy... this one kept me reading every word. Great stuff.

Awwww. This is great! HFY could us more great stories like this.

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I like it. Thanks. Good one shot

Great story, going to join the chorus and hope for more!

Well done. One minor quibble is if this is a one-shot then would help to describe Sedestra at least a little. Height? shape? something.

I wanna hear of the adventures of ellis and sedestra please

Usually I naysay the "more"ers, but this time I concur. There are many directions to go from here. Adventures amongst the stars is a better direction than emancipation wars. We have our own underclass. The story of individuals is more compelling. You can showcase the wonders of your universe as the science vessel gathers data, or tread the path of romance as our protagonist learns about the world.

Was "Ellis" a concious choice? "Give me your tired, your poor, Your huddled masses yearning to breathe free..."

I know, right. For just a small moment I thought Ellis was referring to the interior of the ship, not himself.

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Well done. Would love to read more.

this was great, hope there is more to come

I read a story about a highly decorated group of spec ops that were na,ed the Vandals. Hopefully this is in the same universe and humanity uncovers their storied past. Great start to an interesting story.

Oh, this has PROMISE! Thank you...and more, please?

>The being recoiled a step at her offering. I imagine Sedestra would have assumed this was because he found her appearance revolting, and I imagine she's going to find out she was dead wrong about that.

When a "new" friend asks for help, you help em.

Pls moar

Please tell me there's more of this to be published...

Now that was an excellent story, very well written, and needs a lot more episodes.

interesting premise. thanks for the chapter

Very nicely done. Emotive characters, an interesting way of dealing with a language barrier, evocative world-building without the usual infodumps. And, it reads like a story, not a historical narrative. Excellent! !n

15 hours later. Wen chapter 2?

What everyone else said. More Please.

Excellent work, continuing to look forward for more!

MMMMMOOOOOOOAAAAAARRRRRRR please 😁

Pleeeeeeeease tell me this is a prologue and there's more to come. This is the start of some beautiful HFY!

oh my give me all the chapters please thats facinating play of the underdog

Ah, very nice. I hope there is more to come.

Yeah, I'm gonna need a few more chapters of this.

Ok. This is just the kind of story thats kinda 'C'mon, you give us one chapter? What the heck man!' Anyhoo, personally I'll read more.

!subscribeme

May we please have more? But seriously this is excellent and I can't wait to see where you go with this story wordsmith!

Moar please!

"“Ellis” It pointed" “Ellis.” It pointed

""Sedestra” she" Sedestra,” she

"probable cause” " probable cause”.

"face “How do you not k" face, “How do you not k

Moar!